Overview Assignment Instructions: Following up at WEC Email doc.pdf
In professional settings, effective follow-up communication can strengthen relationships, clarify value, and encourage action. In this discussion, you will revise a professional follow-up email to improve clarity, tone, and effectiveness using business writing best practices.
You will work with a scenario involving the Workforce Engagement Consortium (WEC), a local business consortium that helps organizations improve employee performance and morale through workshops, training, networking events, and business discounts.
After a brief phone call with Jen Askins, HR Manager at Sorenson Materials and Supplies, Sabrina Zambreskie, President of WEC, drafted a follow-up email summarizing the consortiums benefits and encouraging membership. Your role is to revise this message to make it more engaging, concise, and reader-focused.
Your Initial Post (Part 1 & Part 2): is to be posted by Friday @ midnight CST
Part 1: Sentence-Level Revisions
Rewrite 12 sentences from Sabrinas original message to improve writing style at the sentence level.
For each revised sentence, you must:
Identify the sentence number
Briefly explain the type(s) of changes you made
Across your 12 revised sentences, you must include at least three examples of each of the following writing improvements:
Changing I-voice to you-voice
Changing passive verbs to active verbs
Converting nouns or be verbs into action verbs
Removing it is / there are statements
Example for Sentence #20:
(20) You may choose from three membership levels. (Changed I-voice to you-voice)
Part 2: Revise the Email Message
Rewrite the entire email so that it is:
More concise
More organize: ADD a table to list information effectively
More professional and reader-focused
Easier to read and scan
As you revise, consider:
Combining sentences where appropriate
Improving flow and clarity
Adding formatting (headings, bullet points, white space)
Be sure to retain all essential content from the original message while improving its effectiveness.
Get this or a similar paper done in as fast as 4 hours, 24/7.
NB: We do not sell prewritten papers. All essays are written from scratch according to specific needs and instructions
Leave a Reply
You must be logged in to post a comment.